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My heart is a room
with an open window;
the autumn wind
is freezing it
from the inside-

leaves slip in
to fill the void.
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Just a little something autumn themed. :) Have fun with interpretations.

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:iconanimating-emor:
Damn... There's several ways this could be interpreted D:.
Is it good or bad? :D.
PLZ TELL ME ^_^.
/I SKIPPED VOWELS. THAT'S HOW DESPERATE I AM ;D!/
EMZ=]

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Umm... chips:)
:iconcartheinsane:
Haha, I see nothing wrong with finding many interpretations. I'd like to hear yours! :)

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~I am a poet~
:iconcartheinsane:
BTW, this is a piece open to many interpretations. :nod:

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~I am a poet~
:iconanimating-emor:
Well, I have two.
One's good and one's bad.
The good one is that the leaves are a potential lover or something well, like, IDK, maybe a date or something... but something still sucks like a death or something...
Okay, I misread it at first and some how skipped the line about the coldness inside... So the interpretations are mainly based on the leaves XD.
Then the bad is that the leaves are something like mindless sex or something and trying to kill the emotional pain by mere physical recreational activities o.o...
Please can you tell me the intended one xD? I know this is way off...
I'll have another think about it and take into consideration the entire thing...(I have a terrible tendency to skip out random sentences and stuff sub-conciously while reading...)
EMZ=]

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Umm... chips:)
:iconanimating-emor:
OHHH. WAIT. I THINK I GET IT ;D!
Is it like, someone opened up too love or w.e and they were let down big time by some total bitch or something.
And they were about to close up again.
But then some legit person turns up and gives them back some faith in the concept of love?
EMZ=]

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Umm... chips:)
:iconkittykittyhunter:
Ooh~ I kind of see the leaves in a positive way, like they're not slipping in to fill the void because their cruel, but because they're caring ^^

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yuujyou wa kokoro no chuugi

~ The heart’s loyalty is friendship.
:iconcartheinsane:
That's actually not a bad interpretation, I can see how you think that. :nod:

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~I am a poet~
:iconcartheinsane:
Ooo, that's a really good one. :)

Honestly this poem was just a general... "opening up, but feeling rejected"... but the leaves...what are they? Sort of thing. :) The leaves could be almost anything.

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~I am a poet~
:iconcartheinsane:
:meow: Yes, the leaves being a positive thing definitely makes the most sense. The open window kind of represents someone feeling rejected ...because they open themselves up but are left cold.

Whereas the leaves could be someone deciding to enter for whatever reason. :)

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~I am a poet~

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