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Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Song


You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

You better love her
More than you love me
If that's what you call it

You're stuck
with your own reflection,
with a past
you can't bare to see

The past better not repeat

You better be good to her,
because to watch her cry
would be hell

You dare
To put tears in her eyes
And you'll never dare again

You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me
©2006-2009 =CartheInsane
:iconcartheinsane:

Author's Comments

Well, this particular poem/song is based off of the fact that one of my ex boy friends started to date one of my good friends and all I know is he better not break her heart.

Update:
Here is the previous version:
You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

You better love her
More than you love me
If that's what you call it

Stuck in a mirror
Looking at a reflection
Turning from the past
you can't bare to see

The past better not repeat
You better be good to her
to watch her cry
would be hell
would be hell

You dare
To put tears in her eyes
And you'll never dare again

You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

I put in bold what was taken out/changed. The most. As you can see I italicized some lines as well.

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:iconkage-ichihashi:
~Kage-Ichihashi Oct 18, 2006, 6:32:21 PM
-deep breath- Wow. It's good to read your poetry again. Excellent work here. I know the feeling, sort of. Never had a boyfriend before or anything, but the idea of sticking up for a good friend when they're in a relationship... I empathize there. Brilliant job. Keep it up; take care.

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Good things come to those who wait~ :love:
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~incubustrav421 Oct 18, 2006, 7:19:07 PM
there is this emphasis on third party perspective. You have feelings, but only for others as protection, but there is an underline tone of revenge. I'm glad to see that you've finally returned to Deviantart :)

- ... out
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Mood: Astonished ~soulpaste Oct 19, 2006, 12:13:17 AM
ooee, are you using that in an actual song?

i love it, and id love to use it in a song

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Today is a think-tank to live for tomorrow.
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~Stricken001 Oct 19, 2006, 4:22:50 AM
Wow.. its really powerful... i like it.. alot

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-Never look at Defeat... if you want to keep ahead.
-Never leave the one you love for the one you lust, cause the one you lust will leave you for the one they love.
-A forced smile dose not stop the world from beating you for pleasure
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*GoldenGirls Oct 19, 2006, 6:42:14 AM
YEY! another poem!! :boogie:
well... i hope he doesn't hurt her either... you must be a v. caring friend!
xxxxxx
well done, yet again you've portrayed your feelings perfectly!

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You fill your day, most of the time, by being in the washing machine of your own mind, thinking “what’s this, when does it stop, am I enjoying it, I don’t know, oh it’s time to go to sleep, I can’t, I’m worried.”
- Dylan Moran
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~ElementalFae Oct 19, 2006, 1:23:24 PM
oh goody. hooray for ex's dating friends. that always sucks. wonderful poem by the way. :+fav:

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~decus et verum~
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~bunrymay Oct 19, 2006, 5:32:00 PM
its really touching. if ur inlove that person must b lucky to hav u

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Existing in this world What is the reason for me being born?
There are those who don't know the meaning of being alive and just rot away
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Mood: Joy =CartheInsane Oct 19, 2006, 6:45:46 PM
Well I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks :)

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~I am a poet~
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=CartheInsane Oct 20, 2006, 9:28:14 AM
awww, well thank you for your kind words

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~I am a poet~
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=CartheInsane Oct 20, 2006, 9:28:43 AM
thanks ^________^ yeah, guess who it is too :D lol

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~I am a poet~
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