Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
[x]

deviantART

 

Break by =CartheInsane:iconCartheInsane:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Song


You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

You better love her
More than you love me
If that's what you call it

You're stuck
with your own reflection,
with a past
you can't bare to see

The past better not repeat

You better be good to her,
because to watch her cry
would be hell

You dare
To put tears in her eyes
And you'll never dare again

You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me
©2006-2010 =CartheInsane
:iconcartheinsane:

Author's Comments

Well, this particular poem/song is based off of the fact that one of my ex boy friends started to date one of my good friends and all I know is he better not break her heart.

Update:
Here is the previous version:
You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

You better love her
More than you love me
If that's what you call it

Stuck in a mirror
Looking at a reflection
Turning from the past
you can't bare to see

The past better not repeat
You better be good to her
to watch her cry
would be hell
would be hell

You dare
To put tears in her eyes
And you'll never dare again

You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

I put in bold what was taken out/changed. The most. As you can see I italicized some lines as well.

Comments


love 0 0 joy 1 1 wow 1 1 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconelementalfae:
~ElementalFae Oct 20, 2006, 2:50:04 PM
yes, now i know. oh dear. well, i volunteer to help kill if he makes your friend sad. and tiff volunteers to help as well . . . XD. oh dear . . .

--
~decus et verum~
//"[Man's] tragedy is the impossibility- or at least the tremendous difficulty- of communication." - Faulkner\\
|||member of: [link] |||
:iconmeeden:
=meeden Oct 20, 2006, 5:21:37 PM
Amazing - title and words go so well together and the ending finishes it off nicely with a repeat. :silentkitty:
:iconcartheinsane:
=CartheInsane Oct 21, 2006, 11:26:50 PM
Well thank you so much

--
~I am a poet~
:iconcartheinsane:
=CartheInsane Oct 21, 2006, 11:27:54 PM
I'm sure his younger brother might help volenteer as well as trenchcoat boy ...(aka Dan whom I really like right now :) ) ...his younger brother Peter is much nicer

--
~I am a poet~
:icongoldengirls:
*GoldenGirls Oct 24, 2006, 5:58:26 PM
isn't that the same kind of thing??
xxxxxx

--
You fill your day, most of the time, by being in the washing machine of your own mind, thinking “what’s this, when does it stop, am I enjoying it, I don’t know, oh it’s time to go to sleep, I can’t, I’m worried.”
- Dylan Moran
:iconsun-kisses:
~sun-kisses Oct 26, 2006, 8:26:15 AM
wow! awesomely put into words! :) i love ur choice of words as well! yey! :P

--
live, laugh, love!
:iconbunrymay:
~bunrymay Nov 5, 2006, 1:43:23 PM
>XD ur welcomes ^.^

--
Existing in this world What is the reason for me being born?
There are those who don't know the meaning of being alive and just rot away
:iconcartheinsane:
=CartheInsane Nov 13, 2006, 4:00:27 PM
thank you! :)

--
~I am a poet~
:iconsun-kisses:
~sun-kisses Nov 13, 2006, 6:34:39 PM
no need to thank, it was my pleasure

--
live, laugh, love!
Previous Page...23456...Next Page

Details

October 18, 2006
715 bytes

Statistics

71
31 [who?]
686 (3 today)
0 (0 today)

Site Map

©2010 deviantART. All rights reserved
About Us | Contact Us | Site Tour | Help & FAQ Advertise | Services Etiquette | Privacy Policy | Terms of Service | Copyright Policy