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You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

You better love her
More than you love me
If that's what you call it

You're stuck
with your own reflection,
with a past
you can't bare to see

The past better not repeat

You better be good to her,
because to watch her cry
would be hell

You dare
To put tears in her eyes
And you'll never dare again

You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me
©2006-2010 =CartheInsane
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Author's Comments

Well, this particular poem/song is based off of the fact that one of my ex boy friends started to date one of my good friends and all I know is he better not break her heart.

Update:
Here is the previous version:
You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

You better love her
More than you love me
If that's what you call it

Stuck in a mirror
Looking at a reflection
Turning from the past
you can't bare to see

The past better not repeat
You better be good to her
to watch her cry
would be hell
would be hell

You dare
To put tears in her eyes
And you'll never dare again

You break her heart
And I'll break you
Just like you broke me

I put in bold what was taken out/changed. The most. As you can see I italicized some lines as well.

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~sun-kisses Nov 14, 2006, 6:04:47 PM
:D

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~EmoSuze Dec 25, 2006, 4:15:44 PM
Wow, this is really touching. I love the repetition at the end, great reinforcement of the message of the piece.

You're obviously a very loving friend =}

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=CartheInsane Dec 28, 2006, 7:30:49 PM
Thanks so much! Thanks for the favourite, the critique and thank you for deciding to watch me :) I appreciate it.

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~sukacita Jan 31, 2007, 1:18:43 PM
awwww...yea he better not break her >= (
i like ur poetry!! =D

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mari bersukacita!! XD
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=CartheInsane Jan 31, 2007, 1:45:52 PM
yeah he better not

And thank you so much! I'm glad you appreciate my poetry :)

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~I am a poet~
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~sukacita Jan 31, 2007, 4:17:55 PM
hehe no problem ^^

oo it's pacman!

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mari bersukacita!! XD
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=CartheInsane Jan 31, 2007, 9:31:31 PM
LOL
yes it is ;)

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~sukacita Feb 2, 2007, 9:49:02 PM
XD XD XD *points at screen and laughs*
i am very easily amused.

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mari bersukacita!! XD
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=CartheInsane Feb 6, 2007, 3:40:31 PM
yes you are, which is very cute in it's own little way :XD:

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~sukacita Feb 6, 2007, 3:48:46 PM
hahahahahaha thanks XD

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mari bersukacita!! XD
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