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My little darling,
blackened by the moonlight night;
somehow your skin is
falling into shadows, into shadows.

Little pieces of the moon
fall into your eyes;
the stars escape
into the curls of your hair.

The sunlight flowers of your irises
have gone out.
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I actually quite like this one. It just sort of came out while listening to "System of a down" (their self-titled album). :XD:

Submitted to :iconrawem0tion: theme "The Night Moon".
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~Inazuma-desu Jun 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Great imagery! It's really beautiful and emotion packed for a short poem. I really love this! :love:
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~CartheInsane Jun 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very very much. :)
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:iconescapingthepast:
I love this, it is beautiful and unique...
btw system rocks! ;)
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~CartheInsane Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, thank you. :) And I agree. :)
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Little pieces of the moon
fall into your eyes;
the stars escape
into the curls of your hair.

I love this part, brilliance!
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~CartheInsane Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! :)
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:iconbahama-dreams:
You're Welcome
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~Drock13 Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I really enjoy this but if i may make a comment would it sound better if you changed moonlight into moon lit to me has a better flow but other than that i really enjoy your writting
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~CartheInsane Jun 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
That's fine. :shrug: I personally intended it to sound that way. I wanted it to sound different than people would expect it to sound. :)

Thank very much.
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