I think the last stanza that is repeated 3 times throughout the poem is a good stanza, BUT I think 2 repetitions would be enough. I think it would probably be best if you removed the one in the middle. Either way, it is still marvelous, marvelous piece. I find it fun and I love the first stanza especially. Very descriptive and really pulls me in. I can feel what it would be like to listen to that good song.

I love "Meat-eating orchids drag me under" and "A generation of long-lost angst." Very well done. Great job. Marvelous job.