CommentsDevious Comments I really can't thank you enough! I'm so
glad you enjoyed it. First piece I have written in a while and to have this kind of feedback...it just really made my day. I'm really happy to hear all the feelings have come across so strongly. I must have done something right when I can convey it clear enough that my readers share in the experience.   -- "Here's our only conversation we've ever had without using our words to show. And our love is a creation of all the things that have ever had a chance to grow." Charades - Stephen Jerzak  Hehe.
 I'm glad it made you happy. I saw you wanted a critique and thought...ooo, why not?   -- ~I am a poet~ Oops, just realized I said "I" instead of you when I was talking about the universal thing, sorry about that.
 -- ~I am a poet~ It's fine hun. I know what you meant.-- "Here's our only conversation we've ever had without using our words to show. And our love is a creation of all the things that have ever had a chance to grow." Charades - Stephen Jerzak *grins* I really appreciate it.
-- "Here's our only conversation we've ever had without using our words to show. And our love is a creation of all the things that have ever had a chance to grow." Charades - Stephen Jerzak -- ~I am a poet~   -- ~I am a poet~ |
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Favorite line: So many breaths and yet my lungs are not empty.
That line is so magnificent. I love this whole piece, though. I feel like I'm really there. I can relate. I can feel this. It is an amazing feeling. Like floating. The kiss feels so suspenseful. I love this piece so much. Despite the heartbeat to heartbeat idea, being a bit cliche, you took that cliche and made it so beautiful. I renewed it into a feeling that is so universal. A feeling that most anyone should be able to understand.
Well done.